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Some people think that schools should concentrate on academic classes, because they are helpful for future career. And they think music and sports classes are not useful.

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Some people argue that academic subjects act as a key role in
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uture career that they should be laid emphasis on teaching at schools.
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others believe that
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 education
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 of the essence to students in terms of physical and mental health. In
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 each individual student. To commence with, students highly stand a chance of getting well-paid employment in
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ierce job market when they have a profound grasp of academic subjects. In a developed society with
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dvancement of technology, a plethora of recruiters
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 intellectual employees with high qualified level with a view to meeting the strict and complicated standard.
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, students who have a passion for becoming a biologist, doctor, attorney,… might have opportunities to attend their aspired tertiary school and promote in job career as they obtain
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ertain level of academic grades and knowledge. On the one hand, artistic and
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 education should be encouraged to convey at schools since they are significantly instrumental to students. In term of artistic subjects, they could stimulate self-expression, creativity along with cognitive development and sense of individual identity.
Besides
, sports subjects help adolescence sticking with regular physical activities, which acts as an outlet for releasing the pressures of studying as well as those of daily grind and assist them
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studying more efficiently. According to research, students who engage in
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 activities are likely to get strong focus and higher grades rather those who do not. In conclusion,
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high regard by societies as they can provide a bright future, artistic and sports education help enhancing a better physical and psychological lifestyle for stu
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