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The graph below shows the
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 change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces in 2001 and 2006 years. The graduated
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 number changes between a little bit under four and almost 12 points. Except for the universities in Alberta province, the
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 numbers of the 2006
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 had usually higher rates than the 2001
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 a twofold higher for most of all. There is a most significant gap between 2006 and 2001
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 for the universities in British Columbia. In
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 province, the
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 for 2006 was just over ten and for the 2001
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 was around 4 points. A more detailed look at the graph, the universities in New Brunswick had almost 12 points in 2006 what is the highest level for
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 and, nearly 7 points in 2001.
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, in Alberta, the universities had the lowest amount of graduated international students
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 four points. Differently from other provinces, there is just the opposite correlation between the two years. In 2001, the universities in Alberta had slightly more international students than in 2006. But it is not as great a gap as the rest of all comparing.
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, there were similar trends between Canadian universities for 2001 and 2006 years. Clearly, in 2006, universities have more graduated international students than in 2001.
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