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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teacher; others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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According to some people, the academic success of a
student
 is determined by the teaching skills and dedication of their teachers; others insist that a
student
’s attitude towards learning is the key factor that determines whether he will be successful or not. Both views will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, it is impossible to write off the contribution of a
teacher
 in the learning process. Teachers impart knowledge. They clear doubts and guide students every step of the way. Talented and dedicated teachers motivate their students to work hard and help them achieve better grades. Teachers are like
second
 parents and they know the strengths and weaknesses of their students and device teaching strategies appropriate for each one of them.
On the other hand
, a
student
 must have a strong desire to learn and improve if they are to get good grades. No matter how good the
teacher
 is
,
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 if the
student
 lacks the desire to learn nothing can help them. That
also
 explains why every class has some students who never get even the passing marks. The same class will
also
 students who scored an
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 grade in each subject. All of them are taught by the same teachers but their scores vary simply because their attitude towards learning is
also
 different. Some students have a strong desire to learn. They will work hard regardless of whether the
teacher
 is good or not. Actually, they will work harder if the
teacher
 is bad.
Also
, in
this
 day and age when classes are readily available on the internet, no
student
 can blame teachers for their poor grades. In conclusion, the
teacher
 certainly has a role to play in the educational success of the
student
;
however
, the role of the
teacher
 is not more important than the attitude of the
student
 towards learning. A
student
 determined to achieve success will achieve it regardless of whether the
teacher
 is good or bad.
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