Some people believe that educational success depends on good teacher; others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

According to some people, the academic success of a
student
is determined by the teaching skills and dedication of their teachers; others insist that a
student
’s attitude towards learning is the key factor that determines whether he will be successful or not. Both views will be discussed in
this
essay. On the one hand, it is impossible to write off the contribution of a
teacher
in the learning process. Teachers impart knowledge. They clear doubts and guide students every step of the way. Talented and dedicated teachers motivate their students to work hard and help them achieve better grades. Teachers are like
second
parents and they know the strengths and weaknesses of their students and device teaching strategies appropriate for each one of them.
On the other hand
, a
student
must have a strong desire to learn and improve if they are to get good grades. No matter how good the
teacher
is
,
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if the
student
lacks the desire to learn nothing can help them. That
also
explains why every class has some students who never get even the passing marks. The same class will
also
students who scored an
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grade in each subject. All of them are taught by the same teachers but their scores vary simply because their attitude towards learning is
also
different. Some students have a strong desire to learn. They will work hard regardless of whether the
teacher
is good or not. Actually, they will work harder if the
teacher
is bad.
Also
, in
this
day and age when classes are readily available on the internet, no
student
can blame teachers for their poor grades. In conclusion, the
teacher
certainly has a role to play in the educational success of the
student
;
however
, the role of the
teacher
is not more important than the attitude of the
student
towards learning. A
student
determined to achieve success will achieve it regardless of whether the
teacher
is good or bad.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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