Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different ages and cultures together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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modern era, the world is changing a lot as compared to the past and

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is the best way to enjoy

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nowadays. I personally believe that it helps to connect different type of people together.

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, some people think that

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is like magic and it attracts all type of generations.

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like songs and it is very common in all type of cultures and it is

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people prefer to listen

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thing in a crowd and it is best stree killing medicine. Because it is scientifically proven.

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have to organise free shows. So all types of humans can come and they can enjoy in a group. Apart from

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to motivate their army groups. As per the 2016 government report, most of the politician use different types of

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while they are doing

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the songs. To conclude,

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and have fully agreed with it. We all have to

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more musical events. Because it is beneficial for the society as well as for the country.

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different ages and cultures together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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