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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some people that a country’s government should distribute its national budget more to the
education
 sector than the entertainment and sports sector. It is agreed that money should be spent more on educational institutes rather than on sports clubs, cinemas or theatres.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss how
education
 helps a country to be competitive in the
world
 and
secondly
, discuss how better citizens can be made through investing in
education
; followed by a reasoned conclusion. A good point to consider is that through investing in schools, colleges, universities, and research institutes a country can become a leader in the
world
.
This
 is because, the higher quality
education
 a country’s citizen will receive, the more knowledgeable the will be.
As a result
, these citizens will employ their brain for the economic and social development of their nation that will give competitive advantages.
For example
, an empirical study conducted by Cambridge University in 2009 found that the USA became the leader of all nations because of having highly qualified professionals in different sectors. Another reason for spending more money on the educational sector is to make idol citizens among the other population of the earth. People, who have values and ethics in their thinking as well as in their work, are considered as perfect citizens.
This
 can be only done by providing good quality of educational facilities.
In other words
, educated people know better what is wrong and what is right compared to the uneducated people.
This
 can be illustrated by the fact Japanese are known as polite, honest and sincere people in the
world
 because their government impart those values through the
education
 from the primary school. In conclusion,
this
 essay supports the idea of investing more fund on
education
 rather than the entertainment because it facilitates to become a strong country and to make better citizens in the
world
.
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