Write about the following topic: “Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, it is imperative for students to do regular exercise
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studies in order to create balance in life. I completely
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the phenomenon of introducing extra-curricular activities in a children life keeping their physical and mental growth in mind. In order to have flourishing academic career mental health plays an important role. Extra-Curricular activities like exercise, music, dance and many more acts as a stress
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for children. In today's time due to busy study schedule kids hardly get time to concentrate on their fitness.
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, by involving these activities in
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ducation curriculum and making it mandatory to follow, student's physical and mental fitness can be ensured. Another fact is, it
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in raising IQ level in students, making them mentally fit for various upcoming competitions. To exemplify, for
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pelling bee or science and technology, sharp memory is required and daily workouts and proper diet helps in facing
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faceoffs.
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, technology innovations have badly
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students lifestyle.
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of doing physical exercises kids prefer to play online video games on mobile phones. Their social interaction has minimised to
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reater extent. And it has created several health issues among youngsters like obesity, weakened
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. In order to bring back the enthusiasm and courage and eradicate the negative impact of technology on children
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it is highly recommended for parents and teachers to involve
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ajority of children in extra activities teaching them to prioritise their health over gadgets. To reiterate, physical and mental fitness is important for every individual especially youngsters. Our education system needs to come up with strategies to involve students in
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activities and
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create awareness among children regarding how important it is for them to have a healthy way of life.
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