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It seems clear that obesity in today’s society is to some extent due to the availability of fast food. Should governments place a tax on fast food to reduce the amount of fast food consumed?

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In the present era, world’s people are facing the ultimate fact that our young generations are experiencing severe
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health related
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 illness from the very beginning of their life and it is due to
excess
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junk
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food
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 consumption. To forbid the worrying condition, the state is approaching some essential steps and one of them is an enhancement of taxes on convenience
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.
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, I partially agree with the given opinion. As in today’s world, it is one of the most sparkling heated debates. I believe that our leaders should have an eye for finding out some other solutions because only increasing the taxes on fast foods will not hamper the ratio of
junk
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 intake.
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 of all, as we know that, our teenagers are the prime customers for the convenience meals, where most of them are unaware of
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evastating
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 hazards of eating
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 foods. At the same time we can ask, is it their fault? I don’t think so. They should be made aware of the long-term consequences of
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 consumption and it is plausible in several ways.
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, broadcasting
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 adverts on children’s TV channels, introducing topics into their conventional education regarding dangerous
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 effects on fast
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, parents could play an important role in combating
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 worldwide problem by giving their children proper advice and guidelines of having
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alance diet.
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, nowadays people are leading a busy pace of life.
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 they scarcely think of their regular diet, even some of them have no idea about what they are eating.
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, people are depending on takeaway meals for their daily livelihood. The government should impose rules on the working schedules so that folks could enjoy their meals with adequate nutritious knowledge. To conclude, in some of the global areas folks are becoming more habituated to convenience
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 despite realising that they will suffer from heart diseases, obesity and dyslipidaemia in very near future, where only raising the
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 revenue will not slow down the tasty and unsafe
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food
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 consumption.
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