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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, some people claim that capital
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 should be prohibited, while another group of people strongly believe that some kinds of crimes should be punished only by death. In
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wn opinion. On the
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 must be banned as it is too cruel. It can be proved by the fact that a person has no chance to regret and, as a consequence, to change his or her attitude, personality and life at large.
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, some murders and other heavy crimes sometimes happen accidentally, and a guilty person maybe did not want to commit it.
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, a person killed another
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protection.
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, laws and courts in some countries consider it like an aimed murder.
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 why capital
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court practice.
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, not every crime should be forgotten, and some guilty people deserve to be killed cause some of them can be mentally ill people.
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, in
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 man who killed young women and children just for his pleasure. When he was caught by the police it would be insane and extremely dangerous to let him
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stay alive.
The capital
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punishment
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 was explained in
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death can be counted as the
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 for some serious crimes. To sum up, there are two different
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capital
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. Some people think
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 way for punishing for some serious crimes cause not everyone can understand the awfulness of committed things and change himself or herself. In my opinion, capital
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 from different perspectives and aspects.
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