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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The progress of sectors,
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 as health, education and trade, is important for
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rowth of an underdeveloped or a developing country.
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, many believe that the government of developed countries should take responsibility for helping these poor nations. In my opinion, I completely agree that by rich countries support the
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 world countries can grow at a fast pace.
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, a good reason for the government of developed countries to take the responsibility is that it will give the poor nations an initial start towards their
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 and development.
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, healthcare, education and trade are all interdependent on each other,
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 investment in one sector will lead to the
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 of the entire country. India is a prime example, where a small investment by the United Kingdom in its Information Technology, has made it the Technology Valley and is known as a land of producing maximum engineers.
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, another reason for rich nations to take the responsibility of the poorer nations is to think of a long term gain that the world economy can have. While, the process of
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 in poor countries will be slow, but it will eventually make them the contributor to world income. As the most important sectors like health, education and trade are the backbone of any countries economy,
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 by making the backbone stronger the affluent countries can bring about a larger change.
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, America's initial funding to South Korea has made it one of the highest contributor to global income. In conclusion, the involvement of the government of rich nations will not only give these unfortunate nations a kick start but
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 will make them one of the global contributors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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