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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given schemes illustrate Grange lawn that was built between Arnold Avenue street and Eldon Street in 1920 to nowadays. Overall, there are so many differences between these two schemes,
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ountain that used to be in the centre of the square was replaced by a rose garden. Not to mention the stage for musicians was removed and
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 the glasshouse was replaced by the water feature.
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, there are some replenishment facilities of entertainment facilities, including an amphitheatre, café, and children play area. In details, the field was opened in 1920 and visitor could enter the park from south and north gate. On the lower right side, there is a glasshouse placed opposite the pond for water plants while on the left side, a rose field was located between two benches. It is
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 noticeable that the stage for musicians was beside the fountain that was placed in the centre of the lawn. Looking at the
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 picture, the place after reconstruction has an entrance underground car estate
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 to the water feature which replaced the glasshouse. On the centre of the plaza, there is a rose patio and four benches around it and amphitheatre for the concert was placed beside it. There are
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 some additional facilities like children play area and cafe on the right side.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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