Some people think that spending a lot on holding weddings, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views.

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increasingly popular in these times. Wealthy people spend
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uge amount of
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to celebrate social events and have a good time.
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, some people think that
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is a waste of
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and offence for people who
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have the same economic wellbeing. Both views have positive and negative effects which be present in
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players, and the
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richest families across the world have imposed a new trend for expensive parties and celebrations which include
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extravagant
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as , gold chocolate, cruises,
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water from Bali, fancy furniture, designer clothes,
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extinction
animals, and Elton Jhon. All these items and are selecting to impose a wealthy and
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successful
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that
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the spectacular indian's wedding. the bride's father
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normous amount of
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to bring the best party of their
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daughter
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for that. the most famous wedding in Indian was the wedding of a politician's
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daughter
in 2018 and one the big deal for
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celebration was that Obama was part of the guest, the
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of US who represent how powerful are the relationships.
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,
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social event considered the participation of Beyonce, the most famous
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singer over the world.
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rich people spent a lot of
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fancy parties because these represent an image of respect and power.
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, these people have all their rights to spend their fortune how they want it and have a good time according to their lifestyle. While the common citizens
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struggling
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with economics problems, extravagant celebrations
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a provocation and offence for many people. Many countries have faced with inequality, famine, scarcity of water, climate change and unemployment, so , it is
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comprehensible
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this people
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be angry and think that spend too much
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on
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celebrations
and leisure time is throw out
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. Indeed, It was a famous
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in India.
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wner of
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beer and airline companies.
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, he started to have many financial problems and he
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don't
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the salaries of many of the
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' s employees. While
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workers protest for their rights he was celebrating their 50th birthday where he spent a hundred
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million
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Enrique Iglesia as a guest.
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pend
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igher amount of
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entertainment can be a problem in the future and how to affect a nation. In conclusion, people who have a wealthy situation can
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a fortune on entertainment stuff and social events. In many cases,
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people do it in a manner to plots their power and maintain
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social status.
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, it is totally
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understood
understanding
that some people
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with
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behavoir
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behaviour
because it could be violent for people who
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don't
have the same economic situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financially burdensome
  • Unnecessary extravagance
  • Significant life events
  • Cultural traditions
  • Strengthen relationships
  • Community bonds
  • Memorable experiences
  • Investment in happiness
  • Lavish parties
  • Moderation
  • Excessive spending
  • Long-term investment
  • Honoring milestones
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