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It seems clear that obesity in today’s society is to some extent due to the availability of fast food. Should governments place a tax on fast food to reduce the amount of fast food consumed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Weight related
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health
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 problems have been a huge problem for the
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 decades.
Consuption
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Consumption
 of fast
food
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 is an obvious reason as to why people are getting fat nowadays. In
this
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 essay, I will explain why we need new regulations for reducing
fast
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food
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 consumption and
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 obesity.
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, fast
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 companies should
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 accountable for the changes they have been causing in public
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. To illustrate, governments can mandate new
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 policies to fast
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 chains for each item produced. Due to increased financial implications per
food
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 item, these chains would be required to focus on producing quality
food
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 rather than quantity.
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 ultimately would result in less production with
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some ingredients.
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,
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ublic needs to be made aware of what they are putting in their mouths.
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, having to spend more money on junk
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 will make them question while they make purchasing decisions.
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, most governments have recently placed
tax
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 regulations on alcoholic beverages and in return, people are less prone to consume alcohol during weekdays.
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, a similar
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 principle could easily be applied to fast
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 sector as well.
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,
nutricious
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nutritious
 foods and diets can be organically promoted among
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ublic due to less
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 and cheaper prices. In conclusion, I have summarized that creating new
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 policies for both fast
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 production processes and consumption are integral in preventing obesity. I
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 believe that public
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 can be protected by imposing
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ax on convenience
food
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. If
fast moving
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 foods are given
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ree pass as they are today, we are likely to suffer worse when it comes to public
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.
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