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Main Topic: Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet while others believe that nothing can replace physical classrooms with direct guidance from teachers.Discuss both views( and give your own opinion).

#topic #people #schools #children #information #internet #classrooms #guidance #teachers
Internet and digitalisation have become an integral part of people's
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 in recent years. Some people believe that attending classrooms and listening
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teachers, which is
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tandard form of education, is not necessary now, because there are plenty of materials available
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nternet. In my opinion, it is not entirely true since one of the essential
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 of schools is
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 and live communication with teachers and mates.
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onstantly changing world and free access to the world net contributed a lot
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, children can start learning languages or science discipline just sitting at home with their relatives and having
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access to the internet.
Also
, due to the pandemic situation which many countries are suffering today, many teachers could systematize their
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nline form of
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 and successfully continue the learning process. It is evident, the digital era gives us
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access to a huge of data and
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 and we can freely choose whether to learn it. On the other flip side, physical attending classrooms
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 our children a lot of benefits.
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eacher may track the progress or regress in studying directly and implement adjustments if it is necessary.
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, the key role in studying plays practical tasks executed by command and team games which give every member a great opportunity to be
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 of the team and develop communication skills. To summarise the aforementioned above, online form of lessons have
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 our children a lot of benefits by doing the process available at any time with different variations. But
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 cannot replace completely physically attending classrooms.
Submitted by Елена Неразик on

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