Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Marketing appeals
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the audience to
purchase
the new products, as the big companies spend their billions
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dollars to advertise on
the
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huge level.
Therefore
, half of the population say, it is not good as it promotes to buy
the
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unnecessary things, while others support the advertising as it gives
the
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information about the new products. I
am partially agree
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with
this
statement.
To begin
with, advertising increase the hunger inside a human being to
purchase
the new launch products. Take
Iphone
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iPhone
as an example, people prefer to buy the new model every year as a status symbol,
although
they have
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same brand phone previously which works well. Citizens can use
this
money to pay household or credit card bills, to invest or save for their old age,
instead
of making an extra expense that advertisements cause
now a days
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. Overall, advertising
encourage
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people to buy products, that they actually do not need. On the other side,
m
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arketing approach to
distribute
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information to the ultimate consumers is helping to improve the lifestyle and makes life easy going.
For example
, Blenders and dough makers are being possible to
purchase
only because of the advertisements, that people see on the different screens of media. These things save lots of times and energy, which can
be utilize
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on
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doing other chores.
Therefore
, doing promotion is necessary to give up to date knowledge to
the
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society. To conclude, if a person
use
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his brain and only
purchase
those items which are required and will work for the longer period as an investment,
then
it would not be wrong to say that advertisements
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are the main path to promote the information and uses of the new products and services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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