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• Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people can not expect enjoy a job and that having a permanent job is more important. • Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today's competitive era, people have different perspectives on their
work
. It is,
therefore
, some people contend that
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ork environment is immensely essential than prolonged stay in the
job
, while others pretend that
job
 enjoyment is not important over long-term employment. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the viewpoints in detail along with my own personal preference. There are quite a few reasons why people demanding pleasant workplace atmosphere because it is a predominant factor which influence the people to
work
 more efficiently and effectively and ultimately an organisation will generate more revenues if the employees are satisfied with their working conditions.
For example
, according to a survey organised in a textile company in 2018, 60-70% of workers are motivated by the pleasurable
work
 settings.
Thus
, internal satisfaction is far more considerable than
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ife-long
job
.
Conversely
, according to a group of people who favour the stability in one's profession rather than happiness, they think that incessantly working under one employer could escalate their chances to being promoted into the higher positions and with that their salary with increase automatically.
Also
, working with the same organisation make them more experienced and they could anticipate the recognition from the company which is again an exorbitant achievement.
For instance
, there have been some recorded instances of people who are staying in an organisation for years and are tremendously skilful. Overall, it does not matter whether the person is happy with their
work
 conditions or not, the only thing that matter is a secure profession. To conclude, it is true that the workforce has become a competitive domain. Though, some people prefer the working atmosphere and other stable jobs. I personally believe that one's perfection towards
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ob is more required than the long-term wages because if the person is not happy where he/she is working,
then
 the outcome will be certainly affected.
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