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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than studying at home online.  to what extent do you agree?

#group #students #classroom #home
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 auditorium, are considered by some people has
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plenty of advantages for students,while other people
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 that alternative way of education ,
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 as online class, exceeds that. I agree that the best strategy of assuming knowledge
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life
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eacher or tutor. With regards to individuals,who more prefer
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tay at home and studying remotely,there are some obviously beneficial of studying off-line.
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Firstly
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life
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 is a movement. Our organism demand actions to be healthy,
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however
 online classes can'
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 accord us enough actions per day and
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 the habit of
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edentary lifestyle. That has a damaging
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 on our health. The
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 issue connected to our vision. In order to
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 online at home
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we need to stay opposite screen about 6
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 per day at least.
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,
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 amount of hours lead to
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deterotation
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deterioration
 effect on people's eyesight.
Secondly
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,
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 of the most important
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 in
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 to survive is communication,and it is the school that gives us
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 knowledge. Communication is a basic
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requirement
 of people The interaction between people gives us a lot of experience , insights and can show a large amount
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useful
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opportunities
 . In a fact,based our natural we cannot live with
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cooperation
 with other people. The
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reason, why I
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support
 the idea about learning at school with
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other
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pupils
 is more
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beneficial
,is the Internet which has almost answers for our questions. In a classroom
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students don'
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 have a chance to use their mobile phone and find
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xplanation of
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ask.
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life
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we don'
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possibiblity
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possibility
 to rely on the internet and we can use only own
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knowledge
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. Without a doubt,rely on
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wn knowledge
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important
 for us and our future because
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awareness
 present
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 confidence in future.
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,though learning at home absolutely
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convenient
,but can'
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comminication
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communication
,soft skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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