1. The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement

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people believe
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is one of the most important things in society.
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governments income comes from tax.All people who live in a
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pay their tax for good
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make a good balance between
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public
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expenditures to
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,
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.If government
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became a valuable cultural thing
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is some of the most successful industries in Korea. Every year lots of tourists come to Korea for concert or musical.
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way their financial economy grove up steadily.And the other example is holland, peoples are come to visit the museum for seeing
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masterpiece.
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is not just
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help people for caring
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their mental health.In
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a lot of people suffer from mental diseases like anxiety or depression. a lot of people takes different types
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ery huge economic burden for
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or
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is remedies for
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kind of mental diseases.If
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therapy palace their economical burden will decrease. To sum up
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and
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very important for people life.Government invest
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as much as public
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.
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will be developed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • public services
  • economic benefits
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • equitable access
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • prioritize
  • essential services
  • healthcare
  • education
  • tourism
  • global recognition
  • holistic development
  • mutually exclusive
  • philanthropy
  • subsidize
  • infrastructure
  • socio-economic status
  • altruistic
  • civic engagement
  • aesthetics
  • civic pride
  • utilitarian
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