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These days, some schools do not have enough money to pay for all the programs that they think are necessary for their students. As a result, some schools are considering allowing advertisements in their buildings. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?

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In recent times,
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ost of education has been increased multi-fold. Many good educational institutions are not having required financial strength to have multiple courses, due to which they permit sales promotion
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 their premises. In my opinion, it is a right step to have an additional source of
income
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 which will be overwhelmingly beneficial to meet their expenses and increase the number of pupils. Companies pay
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uge amount for their advertisements. When schools support them to promote their products, it creates an
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 flow for them so that they can afford required resources
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 as teachers and
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 to facilitate new as well
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existing programs. Schools especially run by small charity organisations,
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, have challenges regarding money, when they get an opportunity to have
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 by simply allowing a few adverts in their campus, will undoubtedly provide
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ease for them. It is,
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, apparent that had there not been an alternate source of
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 by letting the schools buildings to use as brand promotion, many good schools would not have sustained high operational costs.
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, it enables them to increase the student base as well. Since many people in the society will draw their attention towards the advertisement, it will make them
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notice the school
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. Individuals, those who were not aware
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e
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xistence of
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 school, will now come to know and
enroll
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 their children. Thereby, enlarging the strength of children that they have. As per recent news, to illustrate, some educational institutes have confirmed that many new students have joined their campus post getting to know about them when they witnessed the high raised banners of commercials.
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, if schools are struggling with less number of children, they should allow promotions in their campus which
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 the way for higher enrollments of pupils. To conclude, despite having
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ood motive to provide quality education, some educational institutes find it hard to keep the essential subjects ongoing, the primary reason being insufficient funds. So they let the organisations
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do marketing of their products in their building. In my view, I highly recommend
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 to have
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lternative channel of
income
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 to meet the costs and raise the number of students.

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