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interact with each other has changed because of Technology. In what ways has Technology affected personal relationship? Has become a positive or negative development?

#technology #relationship #development
Dear Gray, In the beginning
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let me introduce myself, I am Nav one who was implicated in a traffic accident at Torbram and Queen road before two months ago. On that day, I was driving a car to
reached
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xamination centre on time, but my car was
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hit
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 by a speedy car when I was waiting for a traffic signal to go. At that time, an angel was sent by God to assist me. I
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 to
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ospital with
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nconscious condition by you, even being a stranger. I would like to appreciate you for
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 act of kindness,
however
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the word thank you is nothing in front of your generosity and politeness which was
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 towards me at the time of tragedy. My family want to meet you and show gratitude, so we would like to invite you and your family at dinner on
this
 Saturday as well as we would have an opportunity to commence a new relationship with the family of kind people. I would like to hear from you and thanks once again. Yours faithfully, Nav
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