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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of people have the opinion that mandatory participation in unsalaried
community
service
 should be implemented in high
school
.
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community
service
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school
 curriculum.
Firstly
, it will discuss the benefit to the student of the
community
 as a training ground and
secondly
, it will discuss the gain that the
community
 will receive in the form of
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dded workforce. Partaking in
community
 activities will serve as a training ground for
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high
school
 pupils. They will have
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review of the real world that will help them to develop and improve their skills, knowledge and attitude towards work in preparation
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 their future profession. They will be able to learn about communication skills, deal with people from different walks of life or background, take responsibilities outside
school
 or home, expand their patience and enhance their discipline and time management. Giving society
service
 will
also
 do well for the
community
 itself. With the help of the youth, manpower will be increased in the area where
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taff is scarce.
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, in a charitable institution for the elderly in
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home care, the students can be another set of hands to help in feeding or cooking food or just simply sitting with them while the staff will do the other work. The students can
also
 be a helping hand in teaching younger children as they may establish more rapport to them during sports or art lessons that will make the children learn more and fast. In conclusion, unpaid
community
service
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school
 program for the benefit of students’
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 preparation and the
community
’s supplemental human resource.
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