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The advances in air travel focuses only in first class and this seems to have left others with no benefits at all. Do you agree or disagree?

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 of air travel in
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 cabin while other classes especially economy are neglected.
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 compartment are thoughtfully priced. With the growing trend of tourism across the globe, so is the birth of
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 airfare. High demand created the necessity for more seats, which compensate for the basic,
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 quality of flying.
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 flights that take the passengers to destinations as with the premium class. A good example of a budget airline is Cebu Pacific Air who held several promotional fares in a year with price starting less than a dollar. Aside from the valid reason detailed above, there are advances for the inferior category, though limited, provided to passengers. A number of premium features can be optionally used.
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, Emirates have complimentary 25MB Wi-Fi for economy customers, which is good enough for sending
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essage through messaging applications. Entertainment is provided in most planes across all flight classes. Overall, features of
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uxurious category can
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ack of the plane areas. In conclusion, lower sets of air travel do not necessarily mean short in features and comfort. With
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easonable amount and adequate commodities, these cabins are still beneficial to its commuters.
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