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Some prople consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying a product (such as a cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world, it is considered that the
cost
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 of an item or
service
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 is the deciding factor for their purchase.
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 essay disagrees with
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 statement as the price directly correlates to the
quality
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 of the product and expertise of the
service
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 provider. To support
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 argument, when
individuals
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 purchase an expensive item from a reputed brand, they pay for the
quality
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 of the hardware.
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 is because
the
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higher amounts of revenue
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 required for the manufacturing company to pay attractive salaries to their employees for their craftsmanship.
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, these
products
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 are made to be user-friendly and
convinient
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convenient
 for the customers.
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, these premium
products
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 are made from carefully selected raw
material
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materials
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 which can improve the durability of the product and deliver reliable
performances
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performance
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.
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 reason, it is clearly evident that better
quality
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 and performance
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contribute to the final
cost
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 of the product and
individuals
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 should not consider the
cost
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 when purchasing
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products
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. With regard to services,
individuals
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 pay for the professional skills of the
service
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 provider. The experience of professionals in their chosen field
play
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 a crucial role in increasing the effectiveness of the
service
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 provided.
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, when receiving medical treatment, patients pay for the knowledge and medications used by the doctor to save their
life
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lives
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 or alleviate symptoms.
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, no amount of money can compensate
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 value of a single human life and all possible forms of monetary and emotional support should be provided to sick people.
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, when
individuals
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 buy a
service
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, they indirectly pay for the years of experience and understanding of the field chosen by the
service
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 provider. In conclusion, it is reasonable to assume that higher costs equate to better
products
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 or services. In my opinion, I agree with
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 statement because of the significant improvement in
quality
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 of the item and effectiveness of the
service
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 purchased and the
cost
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 should not be kept in mind
while
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 buying these
products
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.

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task achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the task, addressing both products and services and why price should not be the sole consideration in their purchase.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion. However, the introduction could be slightly more specific, and the conclusion could rephrase key points rather than just summarizing.
task achievement
Main points are generally well-supported, but the essay would benefit from more specific examples and additional details to strengthen the arguments.
task achievement
The ideas are clear and generally well-expressed, but a few sentences could be more concise, and some minor errors in grammar and word choice should be corrected for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with defined paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The arguments made are logical and relevant to the topic, with good overall clarity in explaining why price should not be the sole consideration.
task achievement
The use of examples, such as the medical service example, effectively illustrates the points being made.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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