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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Nowadays, a lot of people want to have their own
company
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instead
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 of going to the
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. There are a few reasons why they don’t want to work for an organisation.
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, it is really hard to get a job in a big
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. Most people who are looking for their job want to get hired in a
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 with good welfare,
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 as high salary or in a perfect location.
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 , if everyone wants to go into the same corporation, they have to prove their ability.
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 everyone tries to get a good score from university or an internship.
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 it must be too competitive and people might stressed out easily. In a different point of view,
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 generation people are adventurous and creative. They want to do something unique. If they have their own special idea, creating their own
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 would probably be a good idea.
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, there are some disadvantages of being self-employed. If they want to run their business by themselves, they need quite amount of money to start.
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, manage their business means they have to take a huge responsibility.
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, if they work in a normal
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, they would have someone to teach their experiences. It means if you make some mistakes while you work, someone can help you and fix it. In conclusion, if we choose whether getting a job in a
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 or running our business, we would learn some lessons during that process and that could be so helpful in our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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