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it is genereally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. discuss both these point and give your opinion.

#internet #communication #people #place #information #point
The human
brain
 is a complex organ, which alike the heart is actively generating minuscule electrical activity output.
This
 output is an aspect of great importance in studies and researches in neuroscience, as it provides
further
 knowledge about the features and properties of the nervous system. The new century has seen a significant upsurge in the study of the electrophysiological activity in neurons and its excitatory behaviours.
As a result
, new approaches have been used, where the
brain
 cells are seen as RC electrical circuits. From the engineering prospect, the
brain
 cells behave as a group of electrical elements in a close circuit, allowing the current flow through its channels.
This
 is possible because of the conducting properties of the intracellular and extracellular region of the neuron, and the resistance generated by the ion channels. Recent studies have been using
this
 characteristic to introduce an electrical stimulus in specific regions of the
brain
, in order to determine the synaptic strength or plasticity of the neurons.
This
 emphasis has enabled
further
 progress in the treatment of certain diseases and cognitive functions.
Moreover
, some machine interfaces inject a small current pulse into the affected part of the
brain
, in order to control the electrical activity and decrease disorders. Indeed, thanks to
this
,
the
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Parkinson disease can be treated or at least be less severe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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