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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? how can the poor be helped?

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, the starting point of my investigation would be the analysis of the influence of these external factors in the electrical signal of the brain during the two procedures mentioned before, in order to overcome them and determine the accuracy of the recorded outputs. One of the expected outcomes that I am aiming for is to provide and develop a technique where the electrophysiological recording and neurophysiological measures would be less altered by these external factors,
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, making the reading of the electrical activity of the
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 complex. It could leave an open door for
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 studies and perhaps for the optimization of the device performance used in laboratories and research centres.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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