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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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Museums are the place where inventions of scientists and ancient equipment should be displayed. Important information about their studies or some of their biography were kept. Some people think that museums are an enjoyable place while other people understand museums is to be educated. overall, My own thoughts were that galleries were providing information about famous scientists. From which we got knowledge about science, fiction, history, world war and many more.
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, students educational trips were mostly conducted in museums. when I was in school my educational tour was at Sikhs museums which were located in the northern part of Asia and that
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 got most of the information of Sikh religion from there. which was useful for me. Some people took museums as an enjoyable place as they were enjoying to watch ancient stories they had a keen interest in stories or in inventions. Children mostly like old car inventions. The environment of galleries is mostly liked by people they usually visit with their and friends and family and had sone quality and enjoyable
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, Museums is best for education. They were providing science knowledge. Mainly youngsters or teenagers get inspired by invention or scientists. Visiting museums might be helping in the brain development of the child. People had some awareness about their previous inventions, lifestyle, wars.
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, people know about their freedom fighters which fought in ancient
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. People saw physically old inventions and they can learn it for a long
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