You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Congratulate him/her for also being accepted •Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate •Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___,
#friend #study #program #paris #france #•congratulate #•ask #roommate #•discuss #activities #two #addresses #___
Dear Tom
I hope
this
letter finds you well.I'm just writing to both
congratulate you on being accepted and ask if you would like to be my roommate.
When I heard about your Correct pronoun usage
apply
eligible
for the program I was very glad and Replace the word
eligibility
congratulate
you on Wrong verb form
congratulated
this
success.As you know,I have also
been accepted to continue my studies in Paris.
There is a beautiful and touristy city,which also
has high living costs and as you know,we can't use the dormitory this
semester and the fee of renting a room is excessive.
I want to know if you would like to be my roommate?
We can rent a small home together near the university.
Change the punctuation
.
This
way, our costs will be reduced and we can spend our free time and also
divide the housework together.
I think we could be good roommates for each other.
I'm really appreciate
your time and consideration and waiting for your opinion.
SadraChange the verb form
I really appreciate
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve coherence.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider a clearer logical progression of ideas; ensure each idea flows logically to the next.
Task Achievement
Avoid small grammatical mistakes such as 'eligible' instead of 'eligibility'.
Task Achievement
You've included all the necessary points - congratulating your friend, asking about being roommates, and suggesting activities.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've opened and closed the letter properly, which is good for coherence and cohesion.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,