Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays, is really common to see more old people in
care
homes than in their own houses.
This
is because many families do not have
time
to look after them or they do not have families. In
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I will
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the advantages and disadvantages
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going to a
care
home
. There are some good things to go to a
care
home
. One of them is that people who work there
such
as nurses, physiotherapist etc. have
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previous studies,
therefore
, they have a lot of knowledge and skills in many ambits that families may not have.
For instance
, many families who take elderly people to a
care
home
is not just because of their
time
shortage is because they do not have skills of how to do some things.
Moreover
, some families do not go to visit their elderly’s to their
home
,
hence
, that could make them feel abandoned ,
however
, being in a
care
home
they got the insurance that all the
time
will be someone to attend their needs. In
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, no everyone may adapt to be out of their homes. Many old people refused to go to a
care
home
because in there can make them feel that they have lost their privacy or will probably need to change their habits
such
as times to wake up, have lunches or go to sleep.
Furthermore
, in
care
houses have a huge amount of people to look after so it is possible that people who work there could not attend all the times their needs. To sum up, I think that
care
homes have its good things for people who do not have family or they do not have enough
time
to look after them, but, the commodity and privacy that you can find in your house you will not find in another place.
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  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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