In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the population ageing is going forward quicker than how it was in the past,
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because of the lifestyle or the alimentation.
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, many scientists study the possibility to reduce
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using pills and other substances. Unfortunately, that research is not going to stop the people get old so we will still have people old and all of
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carries a lot of cost to the population. I do agree with the given statement because
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is going to get old or sick without exclusion, some of us quicker some of us slower,
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expenses. To start with, it is many reasons that are considerate why the people are getting older that rapidly. One of these is the lifestyle we lead,
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we can be under a lot of pressure because the job is running late or we are having a problem to solve,
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could be the alimentation, decades ago all of the aliments and products were more naturals than how they are now.
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its been injected a substance to make them grow quicker,
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with the meat, the farmers feed the animals with products that contain growing substances. Considering that, we can see why the people are ageing that rapidly and sometimes carrying a lot of issues. Overall,
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, no matter if you take treatments for the ageing or you do not,
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the same stage and obviously, we will
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need
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healthcare to lead with that.
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essential health the government could not afford to pay all of the expenses for
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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