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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is often argued that youthful years are
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ost cherished stage of
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, while there are many who believe that
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ime period of adult age is happier despite
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increased responsibilities. As far as I am concerned, I would argue that even though generally people have more
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 during adult age, holistically they tend to be happier during their youthful time. A growing body of research suggests that teenagers
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ody produces more of serotonin, which is essential for individuals mental functioning and happiness.
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uman development index is more in those countries which are having
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arge proportion of youth.
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, teens learn valuable lessons of
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 excitement.
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, many teens travel around the world and learn socio-economic importance of different places and try to link those learnings in their lives;
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, making them surprise at every moment. While wise use of youthful period may create
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ascading effect in one's learning, teenagers are
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 prone to social evils
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 as drugs and mental breakdown which is required to be taken care off.
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, there are many who argue that
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oremost essential component of living
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 which is mostly available during grown-up times. During
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 time, it is more likely that people have more
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 than teenagers; henceforth, they can
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 their wants and needs which is relatively tough to do during their adolescence.
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ense of responsibilities and liabilities may impact one's health due to increased stress associated with them. To conclude, while teenagers do not have much
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 to spend, holistically they are more than adult mainly due to less stress and more surprised filled
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. In my view, despite having some drawbacks, I believe youthful period is generally happier.
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