Nowadays nurses should not just be required to do basic training but they must have other qualities as well to do their jobs well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is developing faster

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ever before.

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, due to the outbreak of the coronavirus, we can see a lot of problems and disadvantages of the health

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required to do basic training for

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workers is not enough and nurses should have other qualities to do their job well. I totally agree with

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a patient person, a

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should be able to help

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ood joke or unexpectable compliment may help even better than a drug. Unfortunately, health

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huge stress. So, it may be difficult for them to be calm and positive all the time and keep their patients in a good mood.

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, I think, it would be great, if the nurses could meditate or do other psychological

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nurses should learn a lot of the latest information and acquire new skills. As I have mentioned before, the outbreak of the coronavirus shows, that a majority of

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edical staff does not have enough skills and knowledge for working with

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there are no special

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problem were solved. In conclusion, there is a lot of problems, which nurses face today

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medicine workers should not only acquire new skills but

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learn how to keep calm and be positive with patients.

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why, I agree nurses should have many different qualities,

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basic, to do their jobs better.

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast transport for cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today, many people around the globe adapt the Korean culture too much. What problem is associated with this? What can be done about this?

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