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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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In today's world,
advertisement
 has become a significant tool for marketing a product. While some believe that
advertisement
 increases awareness about products that may improve our lives, others argue that
advertisement
 induces people to buy things they do not really need. I strongly believe that the latter is more correct, as it will be explained in
this
 essay. To promote a commodity, companies generally propagate only its bright side,
thus
 providing an incomplete image of the product. If only positive aspects are known,
then
 there is an inclination to buy that particular product and one ends up purchasing something which is not required. Take
for example
 herbal products and weight loss supplements. In data published by the magazine India Today, the use of herbal products to reduce weight has seen
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ignificant increase in the recent years, whereas health experts are of the opinion that weight can only be controlled through proper diet and exercise. Many of my friends who used
such
 medicines have later repented their choice.
Moreover
, children are easily attracted by advertisements. Nowadays, most of the teenagers like to own a smartphone which is a result of
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ass announcement. Recently a school in
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K banned children from using mobile phones inside school premises, as cellphones were the major cause of distraction which affected their studies. In conclusion, it can be said that an
advertisement
 creates an impression on
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onsumer's mind and people end up buying an undesired good.
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thorough research before buying is strongly recommended.
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