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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Good parenting taught to the children in schools should be an essential part of the curriculum, which,
however
, teaches them to the behave and respect their parents as well as learn the sacrifices they have made for their upbringing. Nowadays, it is becoming difficult for the parents to control the
behavior
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 of
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their children at home, for which it is becoming necessary to include a subject of parenting in the schools.
Behavioral
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 Management is key to becoming an excellent
parent
, where, the
behavior
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 is all about being mature, understanding and respectful not only towards the elders but to all, younger to them and
also
 who are of the same age.
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, at
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 ever young age
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they learn the sacrifices the parents
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 made for them during the whole process, from giving birth to raising them. The realization
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how much a
parent
 has suffered through or enjoyed the journey has to be known by the children
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 like it is said nothing is greater than a self- realization.
Consequently
, the
parent
 has a major role to play as well, of being
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 understanding
parent
 , supporting and trusting them.
For instance
, a
child
 in the school blames him for stealing a pencil, you as a
parent
 rather than investigating
about
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it , conclude that your
child
 has stolen the pencil.
This
 causes your
child
 from drifting away from you. To conclude, good parenting as a source of knowledge is an essential part of a
child
 in the school.
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