Many of the medical problems that people are experiencing in today's world are due to the fact that we have a very sedentary lifestyle. To what extent to you agree?To

Leading a sedentary
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is becoming
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public health
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. Sedentary lifestyles appear to be increasingly widespread in many nations despite being linked to a range of chronic health conditions. From an individual perspective, I extremely agree
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statement. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will explain my viewpoint with relevant examples. To commence
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there are some other causes of why
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have medical problems.
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, as the research is starting to confirm
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well-being risks associated with sedentary behaviour can contribute to obesity. To illustrate, many
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do not meet the minimum physical activity guidelines and are at risk of developing well-being issues from spending too much time being sedentary.
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, working long hours and spending time without movement or having a break.
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, physical inactivity is the primary
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of most health problems.
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, some
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are lacking
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exercise
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essential to personal happiness.
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but not least,
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backaches, neck aches
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a few
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have a good sitting habit
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it is even harder for them to sit properly
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a long time.
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of
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, in bad blood circulation and even obesity. It will
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cancer
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. On the flip side, some argue that the sedentary
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in offices is not the direct
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cause
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of a lot of diseases. They claim that
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office work requires them to sit for long, they can relax and exercise their body
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they are working or during break times.
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, the company provides fitness for
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employee to ensure that they have a good physically and mentally
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healthy, while
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while
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some company creates a campaign for their workers to join
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marathon or
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to have an activity. In conclusion, it is reasonable to say that a sedentary
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is the direct
cause
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of a number of diseases. I believe that
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is a choice
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many of the aforementioned diseases could be avoided by changing our
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lifestyles
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.

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task
Be clear about your view from the start and repeat it in the conclusion.
coherence
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea with a simple topic sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected (and, but, also, because).
grammar
Check grammar and avoid long, run-on sentences.
content
Give specific examples or data to back up claims.
task
The writer states a clear view and supports it with reasons.
coherence
There are ideas on both causes and remedies, and a simple structure.
vocabulary
Some correct use of key words like sedentary and obesity.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Prolonged inactivity
  • Obesity
  • Hypertension
  • Coronary artery disease
  • Stroke
  • Diabetes
  • Mental health
  • Depression
  • Anxiety
  • Musculoskeletal health
  • Back pain
  • Posture
  • Osteoporosis
  • Prevention
  • Walking
  • Standing desks
  • Regular exercise
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