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In many workplaces, online communication is now more common than face-to-face meetings. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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A large number of workplaces, video conferences become more familiar than
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face
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 the thoughts of recent years .In my opinion ,
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 trend advantages can overcome the disadvantages. Despite the drawbacks below , I believe that there
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umber
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 benefits of meeting over
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nternet. People from any place can attend with the help of
internet
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 number of employees will able to attend without any gathering rather than a large hall with house full situations .
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Amazon & google arrange most of their meeting over
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nternet as well as they continued their business deals and others works.Not only business purpose but
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 in corona pandemic country’s major part of economic was held over
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nternet which was safe and fruitful .
Besides
 it is
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 method ,some leading IT farms and online enormous companies already some offices .
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the employees work from home and which will safe companies expenses . admittedly there are some negative aspects ,researchers
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face
 to
face
 communications most effective than online communications.
For instance
 , a person who will be in device , he can easily move here and there.
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 it is
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 , it is not fruitful for marketing . As a conclusion, people all over the world are now using the web connection to contact each other, and they often use it for personal and business-wise.
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Submitted by Arifur Rahman Barno   on

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