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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21.

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The journey of
life
 is divided into many phases from a toddler to old and
marriage
 is one of the important parts of
life
. There is a going debate on a topic about the
age
 at which a
person
 should marry.
Furthermore
, many people believe that the minimum
age
 for
marriage
 should be 21. In
this
 essay,we will discuss why
this
 would be great for a
person
 to Larry at that
age
.
Marriage
 is so important for our
life
 or even humanity, that we cannot imagine a balanced society without the presence of family which started after
marriage
.
Although
,
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 the decision of
marriage
 is not a child thing, you need to able to handle the extra responsibilities, for
this
,a
person
 must think like a grown
person
. Going
further
, at the
age
 of 21 at least most people able to think like an adult, which is necessary for making a hard decision after the married
life
.
For instance
, a study conducted by an Australian university found that the rate of divorce is almost 65% for the people who married at 18 years and the reason behind
that is
 they are not mentally prepared for
marriage
 at
this
age
.
Moreover
, at
this
age
,they are more confident about starting a family as they have resources or ability to provide that because at 21 most of the people able to complete their university studies and some even working their dream job. Continuously, in the case of 18 years that not possible because at that time either they are in
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irst or
second
 year of their higher education or some even deciding where they want to pursue their carrier, so that not possible for them to live a happy married
life
 at
this
age
.
Hence
 in nutshell, I would the above mention points already clear my stance that I totally agree with the statement which various point prove
that is
 the right thing to do.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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