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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. how do you think this had changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

Nowadays, it is hard to work without the help of technological appliances. Those gadgets bring lots of advantages to us that improving our working efficiency.
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, with the convenience of technology, I think that there are some drawbacks in terms of
over depending
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 on it. The up-to-date appliances have totally transformed a company’s working style and brought many benefits.
Firstly
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, computers have more functions and cutting-edge equipment. Employees can enhance their working speed.
Secondly
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, it is more convenient to contact
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customers and colleagues by email, message, or
skype
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Skype
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. Those are dramatically decreasing the waiting stage between them.
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, there is no distance through the video call.
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, it is easy to hold a video conference without the limit of
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 and time. Global
organizations
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 or companies
are
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 received positive impacts from it.
On the other hand
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, some adverse effects
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 with the technology
also
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. There is no private time. Sometimes, workers still receive messages from their customers or managers when they are off work or on holiday. It will increase the stress for them and form a culture of working overtime.
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, it is harder to focus on their work result
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 different kinds of
notice
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notices
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including
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, including
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 messages, emails, or even social media.
This
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 will reduce the efficiency and quality of performance. At the same
moment
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time
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, people will lose
the
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negotiation
skill
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skills
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 and social
ability
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. Those cause negative effects on the companies and employees. In conclusion, I believe that those tech-savvy products improve our working environment and change our working methods.
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, it did influence some aspects and
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 some disadvantages.

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task response
Start with a clear view in your first line. Say what you think about tech at work, and end with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use link words to show flow. Use first, next, also, but, however, so.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph and use simple links.
relevant specific examples
Add more clear examples with simple facts or numbers.
grammar
Check small grammar mistakes, like capital 'Skype' and spelling.
grammar
Keep verb tense the same in a stretch of text.
structure
There is a clear plan with intro, body, and end.
content
Both sides are shown, so the view is full.
examples
Some clear ideas and easy examples show the topic.
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