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These days fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of fathers doing traditional duties of mothers
such
 as watching over children and doing regular household activities while mothers go out to do their respective jobs in almost all parts of the world. There are a number of reasons for
this
 growing trend. In
this
 essay, I will depict them and explain why I think the drawbacks of
this
 trend outweigh its benefits. There are a myriad of reasons why enlightened fathers doing conventional mothers’ work is so popular. The most telling one lies in the fact that education is behind the alteration of duties. Not only can these fathers help in developing society to a higher level, thanks to the increased rate of literacy amongst all, but they can
also
 spend quality time with their children.
Besides
, gender equality and companies granting more maternity leaves to mothers than fathers play a key role in fathers doing household chore activities and mothers pursuing respective careers. Needless to say, all these factors stand in good stead when it comes to justifying
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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