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Some people think that music plays an important role in society. Others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #music #role #society #form #entertainment
the given map deficit and Island before and after the renovation of some tourist facilities it is clear from the
first
 map that the island had a small facility but in
second
 mam there are many facilities for tourist before the renovation Island is not developed there are only a few trees and most of the places are empty in
this
 Island there are more facilities like accommodations students swimming peer for boating and so on,
by contrast
,there were no countries for the new construction As well as footpath and vehicle track were constructed in a residential area and beach well motor tracks
also
 wear in residential accommodation reception and pier for boating In summary,the construction was developed and visitors are comfortable to visit an island For that no plants and trees were cut
Submitted by NIKUNJ MANOHAR MEWARA   on

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