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3. Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Well-being is a key part of human lives. The
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 system of the
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 can play a vital role for
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opulation of the
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 and economic growth as well. It is often argued that the
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 of the
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 should be run without taking money. In my opinion, the
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 system of the
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 should have minimal charges rather than 0
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. I will discuss my thoughts in ensuring paragraphs.
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 of all, I believe that free
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isuse of
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. People can visit doctors very often if they are not in need of doctor’s consultation,
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 way people can keep away doctors from their actual duties
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 as emergencies. Due to the free
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, hospitals are always been busy with the patients and long waiting hours when someone is really in need of a doctor. It will become time-consuming and panicking for serious patients.
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, in general hospitals of Canada, anytime there will be a minimum waiting time of 4-5 hours due to cost-effective
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, time and slots can be available when there are some charges for consultation of doctor by visiting hospitals.
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, as I have seen the countries with
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free
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 has many drug addicts rather than countries are charging for services. People even do not care about their selves and involving into
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 bad habits because they do not have to worry about money if they will be ill. The measure drawback of the free
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 is lack of
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atest technology in
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 science.
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, some countries have lack of ventilators in COVID-19 pandemic situation as they are providing free
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 services and government funding is not enough to buy more than a limit. To put it in a nutshell, I must say
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 of any
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 should not be
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expensive but there should be a minimal charge. So, people can understand
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se of
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 and government can afford expensive surgical instruments and
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atest medical equipment.
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