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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays a great number of people are working for long hours,
thus
 having barely any
time
 for leisure interests. By my opinion pro more than drawbacks.
This
 essay we will discuss minus and pluses of
this
 situation. From one hand, people who want to build a career have to spend a
lot
 of
time
 at
work
, trying to show the bosses that they are the best workers.
Also
, many companies, especially international companies, encourage the employees to
work
 harder and over
time
, usually for free.
For example
, employees of companies
such
 as LLC “Colgate and Palmolive”, LLC “OBI”, LLC “Coca-Cola” need pass annual achievement procedure, where every co-worker have to prove that they have achieved big results and deserve to
work
 in
this
 company.
Also
,many companies encourage workers who o not go on vacations. So people who ready job overtime, don’t have vacations, replace other works all the
time
 and take more responsibilities have a chance to et promotion someday. In the other hand, people who
work
 overtime and without vacations have a
lot
 of stress do not have enough space for personal life and usually do not create a family.
Also
, they have a
lot
 of problems with their health.
For instance
, office workers may suffer from poor vision, obesity, and joint pain. People who
work
 overtime can lose concentration and do
work
 worse than it should be done. In summarize, workers who
work
 hard and over
time
 can get a promotion in the future but their health can suffer a
lot
 and these problems with health could be never recovered. So it is obvious that in
this
 approaching more disadvantages than advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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