The increase in food production owes much to fertilizers and better machinery, but some people think that it has a negative impact on human health and community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The recent improvements in eatable

production

has

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provoked critical controversies over the possible damage caused to the consumers. In my opinion, despite there are several benefits from the improved food

production

techniques,it is the root cause for many long term

health related

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issues. On the one hand, with the use of enhanced

fertilisers

and modern machinery, food

production

has increased threefold.

To begin

with,

fertilisers

are essential to increase the capacity of plant

production

, and they accelerate the

plants

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growth cycle. Drastically, the cost involved in farming is reduced with

fertilisers

and leads to more

production

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hort time.

For example

, rice plants take around 4 months to grow from their seed phase.

However

, with the application of

fertilisers

, the growth cycle is reduced to 2-3 months. In a span of 4 months, the rice crop can be produced twice, which is not possible using traditional farming methods.

On the other hand

fertilisers

have several detrimental effects on human

health

. Plants produced using natural manures have more nutritional values compared to the one’s grown using

fertilisers

. In order to promote the growth,

fertilisers

use chemicals and inorganic substances which have

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egative impact on our

health

For example

, Chemicals like phosphorus, phosphate are abundantly present in

fertilisers

which are harmful to people’s

health

when consumed on long term bases.

Therefore

, plants produced using organic

fertilisers

or manure have more benefits compared to the plants produced using artificial

fertilisers

. In conclusion,

although

there are benefits using

fertilisers

for crop

production

, I am still convinced that organic plant product is more beneficial to the human race.

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In a nutshell
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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The increase in food production owes much to fertilizers and better machinery, but some people think that it has a negative impact on human health and community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

For many people, the reason they work hard is to earn more money. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, people now wear western-style dresses such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Write a letter to a newspaper editor about the poor condition of a historic building in your area. In the letter you should What building are you writing about? Describe the current condition of the building What should be done in this situation

We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?