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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people believe that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree? why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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The ever-swelling
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 has demanded extensive research in
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 production and the most promising result is the invention of genetically modified foods. Some believe
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 type of bio-engineering can ensure
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 security for the growing global
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. Despite some risks, I think GM foods can take up the challenge of
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 security. The worst problem with an increasing
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 is in the decline in the available resources.
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 is especially true in the case of available land for agriculture. The quantity of agrarian products is limited when there is a shortage in the area of agricultural land. The result is a production deficit, which may end up in poverty. The best among the solutions is bio-engineering, in which land scarcity would not be seen as a challenge. Another benefit of GM
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 is high yield within a short span of time, of course,
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 is profitable to the farmers, the distributors and
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 the consumers. As the supply of these foods increases the demand for
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 in the market declines. The result is the availability of an essential
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 product at an affordable rate. I need to admit that the regular consumption of these
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 products can have some biochemical and immunological risks among its consumers.
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, there are medical cases reported which have altered the nephrological and hepatic functions among regular GM
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 consumers,
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, these are negligible in number. In conclusion, though there is some health problem with the consumption of GM foods.l think to satisfy the
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 demand for an ever-increasing
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 GM foods can be seen as the best among the available alternatives.
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