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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples of your knowledge.

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Plastic
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 products have become widespread nowadays and the problem of damage they contribute to our
invironment
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environment
 is more acute than ever. For the great majority of people
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it is evident that our land, oceans and seas suffer
of
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from
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plastic
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 shopping bags, which is being used worldwide. In my opinion,
them
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 should be banned and replaced with
e
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co-friendly substitute. The
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 thing that needs to be said is the usage of
plastic
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 bags have a negative impact on the environment because it releases toxic components and takes a long time to decompose.
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 material is being accumulated into the soil or eaten by animals or fish.
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, the soil became intoxicated and unfruitful, while animals are being poisoned and eventually dead. There are a lot of examples on the internet we can find where researchers, rescuers or volunteers try to safe animal's lives suffered from eaten
plastic
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 bags. Another way of looking at the question is that
plastic
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 bags are the most suitable for their cost producing. The process of manufacturing is less expensive and easier compared to glass, metal or other material.
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, having accumulated a great amount of
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 product, humanity
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 not bother to recycle it in a proper manner. From my own experience, I have refused the usage of
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 bags at all and use a natural fabric shopping bag. To draw the conclusion, one can say that the damage of using
plastic
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 bags prevails on its cost benefits and the best decision is to replace them to ecologically natural items.
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