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Compared to our parent’s generation, life has become much more stressful. As a result, stress-related illnesses are on the increase around the world. Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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Every
day
, someone from a different part of the world trying to make some change in
this
 world to make it is a better place to live.
Although
, without any doubt,we already make
this
 generation a more complicated and tense full as compare to our elder genesis.
Further
-more we have seen many new stresses related sickness which is surging
day
 by
day
. In
this
 essay,we will discuss numerous reasons behind
this
 and how we can cope with
this
 problem. The major reason for
this
 problem is social networking sites, where we spend all
day
 checking other people and comparing ourselves with them. As, not all fingers are equal how can be humans and in
this
 comparison, we make our
life
 worse. Continuously, the other reason behind
this
 trouble is the fast-paced
life
, where everyone is working hard to achieve something and, in
this
 process, they forgot how to spend quality time with others.
For instance
, we think that when we have a nice car or a big house
then
 we going to have a good stress free quality
life
, but we spend all our
life
 in getting those things and inversely we get more stress after we bought these things on loans or mortgage. Alternatively, we need to change our lifestyle a little bit if we want to overcome from
this
 solution.
Firstly
, we have to limit our time on social networking sites and many studies found that people who spend less time on these sites are happy than others. Along with, we
also
 need to change our view about these tangible things and take a break from
this
 fast-paced
life
 whenever we need. Taking all into account, I think everyone should apply above mention solutions and try to work smarter than harder. In
this
 way maybe we can live a prosperous
life
 like our parent's generation.
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  • Heightened stress level
  • Multitasking
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Exacerbate
  • Comparison culture
  • Economic pressures
  • Job security fears
  • Noise pollution
  • Urbanization
  • Work-life balance
  • Mindfulness
  • Meditation
  • Employee well-being
  • Stress management
  • Psychological well-being
  • Counseling services
  • Therapy
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