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rented and owned accommodations describe overall changes

#accommodations #changes
The graph shown above
it
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showcase
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 the percentage of household owned and rented
accommodation
 in England and Wales from the year 1918 to 2011 . The percentage of
the
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accommodation
 in regards to owning and renting
have
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has
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 been changing in the going year
at
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to
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 some extent renting
accommodation
have
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has
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seen a
rise
 and a fall in ongoing years
whereas
 owning an
accommodation
have
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has
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 seen a gradual
rise
 in ongoing years .
In
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From
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 1918 till 1961 there
have been
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was
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 a
rise
 and a fall
of
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in
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 rented
accommodation
 but in the year 1971 rented and owned
accommodation
 is on a
tip to toe
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tip-to-toe
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 scale of 50
percent
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 which shows that there is an equal means of rental and owned
accommodation
 household is familiar with the people .
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On
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In
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On
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the other
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other
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the other
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 hand if we look at
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the
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rented
accommodation
 from 1918 to 2011
have
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it has
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 been going through a
down
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downward
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 surge but when it comes to the owned
accommodation
 there is a
rise
 . Owned
accommodation
system
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systems
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 haven’t been on a downscale a lot but
it
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they
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 have done a great
rise
 from 1918 to 2011 where the mark
of
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owned
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the owned
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 system
have
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has
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 been gone down of a sudden it
have
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has
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 shown a remarkable
rise
 from 1918 to 2011 where the graphs
of
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owned household have done a steady growth and improvement as compared to rented
accommodation
 where it
have
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has
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 been changed from the top mark to the bottom there have always been a constant
rise
 and inflation in mark in regards to rented
accommodation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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