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In many western countries there are an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children?

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The importance of couples choosing to have no children is always a debatable topic. Even though many people claim that couples should plan on having children in
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atter proposition appears to be more rational. The following essay would
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 lead to a plausible conclusion. There are
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 argument, but the most preponderant one stems to the fact that having kids among the couples build
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, a study conducted by the University of Oxford found that
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 parents who choose on having kids in their
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 parents think they may not look after the kids and consider it as an unnecessary financial issue. According to argument aforementioned, one can reach to the conclusion that having children helps parents to teach their kids about love, care, teach them the difference between what is right and wrong, and learn many things from it, and it is expected that people take cognizance of
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 the government should establish guidelines to educate people.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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