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In some countries owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this a positive or negative situation?

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Home is everything for anyone. Home not only give you a shelter, but
also
 a place for a
lot
 of emotions and memories. We spend most of the time in our
life
 at the
house
, so everyone connects to their
house
 emotionally. In some countries,
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ajority of houses owned by the people living in it and they opine that owning a
house
 is the highest achievement in their lives. In my opinion, it is good thinking and it will help anyone to thrive in their lives.
Besides
 food and water
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humans required a
house
, it's a basic requirement. It gives a place to live with your family. Can you imagine
life
 without a
house
? It is not at all possible. There are facilities like rental houses are available across the globe anywhere. People who can't afford to buy their own
house
, rent a
house
 and live there with there families. Most of them have to sign bonds or contracts, which will lock them to that particular property. The owner of that
house
 owns all rights and he can give
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 notice to vacate at any time. Tenants can't do any repair or renovation works if they want to. If they want to do any changes to the property or want to move somewhere they should report owners. A
lot
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people don't like these restrictions for their whole
life
,
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 so that they prefer to own a
house
 at
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ertain time of their lives. In some societies, people give a
lot
 of importance to houses and they
work
 hard to own a
house
. Real estate is booming everywhere and demand houses making prices skyrocketing. Owning a
house
 a really big thing and very expensive as well. So people in some countries like India, invest a
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money to buy a
house
. They
work
 hard and start saving money for years to buy a
house
. Society believes it is an ultimate achievement. These thoughts drive them throughout their
life
 to
work
 hard a save money. To conclude, I believe that aim to own a
house
 in a
lot
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countries drives people to
work
 hard and achieve their dreams.
This
 is a good thing for anyone's development in
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life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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