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Some people believe that individuals are born with the leadership. Other say that these skills can be developed. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #individuals #leadership #skills
Leadership
 is
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 quality of a person who has the ability to motivate the people around him with his speeches or writings. Only a few people
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this
 ability. Above all,
leadership
 has led
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the progress of human civilisation. Without
leadership
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no organisation in any part of the
world
 can withstand the hurdles. In most parts of the
world
 debate about the
leadership
 skills has taken place where some say that these skills are gifted to them. But there are some people who
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 developed themselves as
l
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eader by observing the
real life
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 problems so that the people who trust them
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 need to suffer from the existing problem. Not all leaders
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s
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ame agenda which can change the
world
. Most of the companies in the
world
 select few people as team leaders for the group because they have some idea on what decisions to take and how to implement them for the company’s future.
Also
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they must have
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dea on how to solve any issue that might happen in the future which can
creates
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 hurdles that
impacts
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 the company’s growth. There may be few people who are born with
leadership
 qualities. There are many political leaders who
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 guts to take steps which might be a problem at present but can solve many problems for
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future generations. In my opinion
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a leader must
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possess
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 passion and strength to lead a wide range of people into a better
world
 so that our upcoming generations can be benefited.
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