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Band 7.5

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping centre near your home. Write a letter to the council. In your letter say how you heard about the plan explain how you feel about it ask for more information about it

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Dear sir, I'm Dheeraj SUdarsanam. Living in the Mullenger Road, Braybrook. Recently, when I was talking with my friend who works for the council, I got
know
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to know

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 a private developer is planning a shopping centre in Laura streer, Braybrook which is the
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 street to my neighbourhood. I
really
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was really

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 surprised and happy at the same time, because it brings a lot of facilities to the suburb. It is very hard for the residents living in
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 suburb to stock up on the basics. The nearest shopping mall is around ten kilometres away. The plan to open a shopping mall in
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 area is really good news for the residents. We are really interested in the plan and we want to know a bit more about the shopping centre. Kindly, give the information about the shops that are going to open,
area
Correct article usage
the area

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 of the shopping centre, jobs it can create
to
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for

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 the local people. I appreciate a response from you. Regards Dheeraj

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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